https://www.hg.org/legal_articles.asp This page provides a wide source of articles that explain situations, dealing with law, in today's society. I will use this as one of my broad sources that I will be able to use as many smaller sources. My interview will be with a lawyer in divorce law, so my main focus will be around divorce law. I will use the various sources to find more specific articles to divorce law. https://www.hg.org/legal-articles/giving-children-custody-of-a-house-after-divorce-48137 This source deals specifically with divorce/family law and the children in the case, which is what my interviewee deals with and what I will pursue. I will use this to specify what the topic of the interview is and what I want to be involved in. This source really goes in depth as to what divorce/family law primarily deals with in each case. In my interviewees case, he deals with clients' children and who gets custody over their children. http://www.levinfamilylaw.com ...
Popular posts from this blog
Commercial analysis
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Oc4QdfatdVM The old spice commercials include ethos, pathos, and logos equally the same. The ad makes the audience, primarily men, believe that if they use old spice, they can look like Terry Crews as well. This appeals to the ethos part of the ad where men desire to look like Terry Crews. This ad also uses logos throughout. When Terry Crews flies through a wall, on a jet ski, he says that he can travel through commercials. The ad starts out as Bounce Dryer Bars, then Terry Crews invades the commercial. This leads the audience t\into believing that if a product can travel through commercials, then it's worth buying. Lastly, this commercial uses logos. In the ad, there are explosions and yelling that grab the audience's attention emotionally. Throughout the ad, Terry Crews keeps the audience hooked through his constant yelling about how much power old spice evokes.
The second paragraph of your introduction seemed opinionated. It is important in a research paper to stay neutral and unbiased, while also explaining why the research is important. You made a claim that the athletes were starving, this seemed a bit dramatic, with extreme claims like this, there should be sources to support. Also in your introduction, you should include the gap in knowledge as long as a clear hypothesis or research questions.
ReplyDeleteWhen internally referencing your charts, sometimes you italicize the chart number and sometimes you do not. What ever you choose, let that be consistent.
Your procedure section seemed small. Maybe add some extra specifics to enhance that section of your paper. While you did a great job of being clear and concise, your audience may have missed out on some important areas of your procedure. Also, in your discussion section you can mention that because you only surveyed a fraternity, you did not hear the opinions of females at all in your study. This lack of perspective definitely impacts your data and could be interesting to explore in future research.
In terms of Language Use and Format, make sure that all your internal citations include a page or paragraph number. In addition, remember to include an abstract section before turning in the final draft.
Overall, your paper was very clear and to the point. I would re-read through your paper and make sure that the sides of the argument are stated, and that it is not one side heavy or being persuasive.
Your rough draft is overall good paper, and you are clearly stated problem, findings and implications in your research. Your flow is well which helps reader easier to understand your findings.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I think you should change some formats on your paper. First, this paper didn't have "Abstract" at the beginning. Your in-text citation lost page number or # of paragraph. The correct format is (author, year, page number).
You can try to give more suggestions at the end of your discussions.
The reference page should use hanging format.
Your charts are really help reader to understand your research, good job.
The other parts are doing well.